A. Identify each of the following thesis statements as
adequate or inadequate.
If the thesis is weak or insufficient in some way,
explain the problem.
1. I think Schindler’s List is a really interesting
movie that everyone should see.
- This thesis is weak it’s an opinion.
2. Which cars are designed better, Japanese imports or
those made in America?
- This thesis is inadequate. Because it is a
question.
3. Some people think that the state lottery is a bad way
to raise money for parks.
4. My essay will tell you how to apply for a college
loan with the least amount of trouble.
- This thesis is weak. A thesis should never
start with “My essay will tell you”. A better thesis is: Applying for a college
loan with minimal amount of trouble can be very easy.
5. During the fall term, final examinations should be
given before the Winter Break, not after the holidays as they are now.
- This is an adequate thesis. From this
thesis, I know that the writer is going to tell reasons why they think final
exams should be given before Winter Break.
6. Raising the cost of tuition will be a terrible
burden on the students and won’t do anything to help the quality of education
at this school.
- This is an adequate thesis.
7. I can’t stand to even look at people who are into
body piercing, especially in their face.
- This is a weak thesis. You never start a
thesis with “I can’t stand”. From this thesis, there is no way of knowing what
the subject of this essay is.
8. The passage of the newly proposed health-care bill
for the elderly will lead to socialized medicine in this country.
9. Persons over seventy-five should be required to
renew their driver’s licenses every year.
10. Having a close friend you can talk to is very important.
B. Rewrite the following sentences so that each one is
a clear thesis statement. Be prepared to explain why you changed the sentences
as you did.
1. Applying for a job can be a negative experience.
2. Skiing is a lot of fun, but it can be expensive and
dangerous.
3. There are many advantages and disadvantages to the
county’s new
voting machines.
4. The deregulation of the telephone system has been
one big headache.
5. In this paper I will debate the pros and cons of
the controversial motorcycle helmet law.
6. We need to do something about the billboard clutter
on the main
highway into town.
7. The insurance laws in this country need to be
rewritten.
8. Bicycle riding is my favorite exercise because it’s
so good for me.
9. In my opinion, Santa Barbara is a fantastic place.
10. The Civil Rights Movement of the 1960s had a
tremendous effect on
this country.
Narrow the subject and write one good thesis sentence
for five of the following
topics:
1. A political or social issue
2. College or high school
3. Family
4. A hobby or pastime
5. A recent book or movie
6. Vacations
7. An environmental issue
8. A current fad or fashion
9. A job or profession
10. A rule, law, or regulation
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